Lorenzo #2

I can't really write something good, all I know is the best is to be straightforward. It's only been a while since I wrote my first English poem.

Getting down to the business, tomorrow is my birthday and I promised this guy that I'll publish the poem I made for him. This is not the first one, but I chose to publish this one because I liked this one better. I'm open for any kinds of comments, and here it goes.

Now even I cant feel the emptiness
Of us being apart miles away
At first it felt like a test
Now both of us seem to have found a way

It didn’t seem right
But then you said just hold on tight
That this is our fight
And one day itll all be alright
Itll all be worth it
Our love will never stop to ignite

You got me surrender
Because no one ever loved me better

If theres a reason beyond I probably should care
But your love’s something I would happily bear
Oh my love, that’s just something very rare
Youre always on my mind, I don’t think its fair